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I’ve been toying with the idea of making a post about how to do beta reading. I’m by no means an expert or anything, but I’ve been on both sides of the experience, reader and author, and I have a thing or two Ic could share. If this is something you’d be interested in reading (and, if reading it would help allay any fears you have about being a reader) let me know, and I’ll wip one up.
Did I mention I love writing about Nica? Writing from her perspective is nerve wracking, but I never get tired of watching her through the eyes of someone who finds her fascinating.
Nica began to pace, stepping lightly from foot to foot, the motion almost to elegant to be called pacing. It wasn’t quite dancing, but there was music in it, something lyrical. Her motions embodied the serpent principal of ramn: motion, lyric, and beat. It was oversimplifying to call ramn mere “dancing”. Proper honoring of ramn permeated one’s life, one’s being—as it clearly did in this hawk that moved like a serpent.
This is leftover from the infamous “moved with lyrical purpose” line. Okay, so maybe it’s only infamous to me, but believe me, the struggle was real. I loved describing Nica’s movements as lyrical, but it just didn’t convey as much as this section does. But you’ll notice I was determined to keep the intent. Nica is nothing if not poetry in motion, music made flesh, song given life. I really love her. 😛
The edits have made it far enough along I’m opening it up to beta readers, so if you’re interested, drop me a comment. 😉
Sometimes you get married to an idea.
Sometimes, it takes a strike of divine lightning bolt upside the head to make you see the light.
Fortunately, it wasn’t quite that drastic when I realized I could move scenes around, but I felt a bit like I’d taken a hammer to the eyes. Things have been a little like pulling teeth, trying to get some traction with these re-writes, but now that I realize I’m not married to the original timeline, they’re going a little more smoothly.
So enter Nica, much sooner than she had in the original (which is a good thing, I think). I’m taking some feedback from other works, and I’m trying to remember to use more descriptive language. I’m not sure I’m in love with this, cause I feel like it breaks up the pace a bit, but there’s really no better time to describe a character than when they first hit the scene. *shrugs* Either way, it’s pretty, and will hopefully give you guys a clearer idea of what Nica looks like.
Author’s note: Apologies you guys! I meant to publish this last week, but apparently I only saved it as a draft. Sorry to keep you waiting!
Had a lot of false starts with these re-writes. I went off in one direction, took a long break to work on Kortan’s story to get some much needed background information, and now I’m back on Asylum’s edits with a fresh new face and new ideas. To celebrate, I offer a sneak peak teaser of Asylum’s new opening!
With Winter Solstice right around the corner, I thought I’d share some fun world building stuff I wrote forever ago. Not all of the characters will be familiar yet, but I thought a look into serpent tradition from various perspectives might be fun to read anyways. So Happy Whatever, have a present! Finally, we hear from Cera, a very young modern day serpent.
With Winter Solstice right around the corner, I thought I’d share some fun world building stuff I wrote forever ago. Not all of the characters will be familiar yet, but I thought a look into serpent tradition from various perspectives might be fun to read anyways. So Happy Whatever, have a present! Gather round and listen to Seth’s version of the tale.